Funny thing is, I think this pitch is one of the worst thngs I've ever written. Which is a good thing, because that's what my literary agent told me to do. He said to write it as if I were going to present it to a bunch of kindergardeners with ADD, and then to go through it afterwards and make it more simplistic and referential. The more current movies I could compare it to, the better. In fact, if I could only describe it in terms of current movies, that would be best of all.
So I gave it a shot, and this is what came out. (I've tried to hide it behind a link, but can't figure out how to do that.)
Reiffen’s Choice is a classic fantasy in the tradition of the Lord of the Rings and Harry Potter, filled with non-stop action and jaw-dropping wonder. Powerful Wizards, not unlike Saruman and Voldemort in their way, take aim at the young heroes, who have only their pluck and a few talented friends to help them. By the end of the story Reiffen, the protagonist, faces a terrible choice: should he stay with his friends in Valing with the talking seals, or should he return to the Wizards to learn their magic, risking everything he loves in the process?
Call it the Prometheus myth, only this time Magic is the fire.
As in “The Lion King”, Reiffen is a prince whose rightful throne has been usurped by his evil uncle. At the start of the book he is kidnapped by the Wizards, who want to use his claim to further their own ambitions. His friends Ferris and Avender, along with a talking bear named Redburr (a cross between Shakespeare’s Falstaff and Gandalf the Wizard) and a dwarf named Nolo, set out to rescue him. They plan to sneak into the Wizards’ fortress through the Stoneways, the vast underground Dwarven kingdom. Picture Moria, from the first Lord of the Rings movie, but bustling with light and activity. Their travels include flying in an airship below the bottom of the world, and a wild underground wagon ride that could be right from the latest X-Box videogame. They also meet a talking rock, who helps save them at the last minute, and fight a Smaug-like dragon in the darkest corners beneath the earth.
At the end, back home in Valing, it becomes obvious to everyone that Reiffen has been changed by the Wizards, not unlike the fate of Edmund in C. S. Lewis’s classic, The Lion, The Witch, and the Wardrobe. Will he be able to throw off his experience and resume his old life? Or will he, like Frodo Baggins after his experience carrying the Ring of Power, find that he can never regain the innocence he lost? In the end Reiffen must make his choice alone, and bear the responsibility for his decision.
Plot Synopsis Project participant links: (Pardon me if the links don't work, but this is well beyond my LJ competence.)